Writing Learning Story

In my writing I was learning to write a Narrative - fictional story about me as a 18 year old boy who's name was drawn out of the ballot to go and fight in World War 1.

I have also been learning to use descriptive language to describe the character so I can paint a picture in the readers head so the reader can understand and visualise the story clearly.

When I write I have to make sure my ideas in order of what is happening, so that the reader doesn't get confused. For e.g. I need to group my ideas in paragraphs and make sure my paragraphs are connected. 

In my conscription story I was learning to use speech marks to show when the characters are talking. I learnt that this is a good way to show the reader what is happening rather than just telling them. It makes my writing more entertaining.

I can use what I have learnt from my reading to help me describe, explain in my own writing

“Mum I have to do this. Its the only choice I have right now otherwise I’ll be in prison, probably forever!”. “OK son. It's your choice, but promise me you’ll take care of yourself.” “I promise mother”.

War day: The next morning I woke up unexpectedly feeling sore and strange.

I don’t know why? Bruises all over my legs, hands going sloppy. ‘PHEW’ that stopped.

I can also use similes, verbs and adverbs for times when my writing is boring e.g. I gently grabbed the letter off him as if I was being awarded something really nice.

My Next Steps are to start including facts and the 5WS so it could sound more interesting and like it is written in real life, like back in the old days.

Evidence: Unexpectedly Drawn Out Of The Ballot